My contest introduction

[NewKnight15]

~~~Chapter Four, The conclusion, told as Steve, Mango, and James~~~ **Mango** I raced past the empty cells with Steve right behind me. I ran to the only place i could think of.. the kings chamber. "What the hell is going on!?!" I yelled as soon as i got in there. "The fencingsucks and the Muu are attacking us.. why did you think we meant when we yelled were under attack? Now go out there and fight!" he ordered distracted I ran to the outer walls and raced up to the platform. "Oh **** ..."I muttered. There had to be over 150,000 men jogging up tp our gates. Behind them about 5,000 archers, and behind them 25,000 calvary. At the most we had 20,000 solders, 500 archers, and 1,200 calvary. "This is gonna hurt..."Steve said responsively* as he came onto the platform. "Everybody down!" Someone ordered. Not even thinking i fell to the ground with Steve already there before me. Just in time too i thought as i looked up and saw thousands of arrows go by. "Counter attack!" the same person yelled. "Space? Honey what are you doing here?" I asked as i saw my boyfriend getting ready below me for the enemy when the breached the gates. "Just released me from the med babe im in this fight. Good luck." he replied already running with his other knight friends. "Be careful"I yelled as he ran out of sight. ***Steve*** So that's who her boyfriend is... great a knight. shell never go out with me now. who would choose a cop over a knight?" i wondered disappointed. "Here they come!" Someone yelled. BOOM you could hear the ram hit the door as they tried to breach our gate and get into the castle itself. Boom... cccrrrreeeeaaaakkkkk.... SNAP. And down the gate went. "Oh God..."i prayed. "Attack!!"someone from the opposing army yelled. "counterattack" space yelled. The sound of screams, metal on metal, and battle cries could be heard as the to armies crashed into one another. It was going to be a swift short battle when we were easily outnumbered at least 4 to 1. I picked up a sword and raced after Mango into the heat of the battle. I struck right and left using everything i had ever learned. I struck down many of the enemies until my sword was parried in a thrust and flung away. I was on the outskirts of the battle now so no one could help me. The enemy knight saw that i had no weapon and began to laugh at me. He brought his blade up and started to swing but then an arrow appeared through his chest. But the force that he had been swinging with still carried the blade. "Umph.."i sighed as the blade sliced through me and i began to see a hazy black around the edge of my vision. So this is what death looks like i thought to myself. ***Mango*** "NNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOO" I yelled as I say Steve go down. I ran through the battle killing everything that moved. My anger suppling my motivation. I had fought along side my husband until he too was struck down. We were losing, I hated to admit it but the place where i grew up and had lived out my adult life was going to be put into the flames. As long as that was going to happen I might as well take down as many of the other side as i could. This is it I thought This is how it ends.... ***James*** "NO" i yelled as Steve fell to the ground. I was too late. "This is for you Steve"I yelled as I raced into the heat of the battle. Hopeless is the one word i could think of that could describe the battle. I saw someone turn towards me and raise their sword. Without thinking I struck. Thud was the sound i heard as his body hit the ground. "Mother.. Father... Please help me.." i begged. I had come to love this kingdom and these people and my newest friend was already dead. Strangely enough Clouds seemed to roll in and lightning played out over the battlefield. An opening appeared in the clouds and armor and a sword came down... straight towards me. Through the hole i could see a beautiful kingdom... **Zelda** "The kingdom of the stars... James!" I realized as i remembered the castle. ***Mango*** "What the Hell?" i thought as i saw it happening. Soon every knights eyes from both sides were looking skyward. More holes appeared in the clouds and dark armored warriors began dropping from the sky forming a circle around one lone boy about the age of 15. No.. could it be? James? I thought I locked him back in the cell. ***James*** As the sword pierced the ground next to me the amour snapped itself to form onto my body. Dark warriors were at my side waiting for my orders... I picked up the sword, raised it above my head a said very softly but still everyone heard i said.. "Clear the kingdom of its invaders," The dark warriors rushed into the battle and with the Arcon knights made short work of the Muu and fencing sucks. I looked at my sword... weird. It was jet black but still seemed to glow. every now and then something would shoot across the blade.. some things that looked like shooting stars. But of course by now the battle had resumed. I ran into and the magical sword killed everything with one swipe. In minutes the battle was done. The kings captured and the warriors either dead or running. My knights and I went back to the kings chamber and awaited his arrival. When he came he just said. "We truly owe you Prince James. You are the new knight and the new order" ***Steve*** "Ouch! don't you think that's a little tight?" i complained. "Don't be such a big baby. It will make you get better faster." Mango said as she dressed his wound. And then pulled him into a kiss that lasted several minutes. ***James*** One of my knights came to my side and asked me if I would like to return home. "This is my home my dear companion... this is home..." ~~~~~~~~~~~THE END~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

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~Toma El Riesgo~

[Iwant2bafencer]

I for one liked it!
Lady Rosaline

[Fencing Angel]

for once i argee with space.. it would make the story alot easier to read.. but i liked it too..

[NewKnight15]

how and where?

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[SteveMcDonough]

I don't know how to add breaks. You could perhaps just put it into paragraphs... just a suggestion.

Great story, but a day out or the contest. They might let you get away with it.

Steve.

[This message has been edited by SteveMcDonough (edited 07-20-2001).]

[NewKnight15]

I really hope they do and i posted it as sonn as i learned what the deadline was. I hadnt seen it before. But when the winner is decided will someone please email me saying who it is? RRExpress@aol.com
Make sure to put contest winner in the subject box.

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~Toma El Riesgo~

[Moonitic]

Ok gang...here's a couple general rules for paragraphs:

1. One person speaking at a time within one paragraph.

2. One idea at a time within one paragraph.

If there was a conversation between myself & Steve, it would be broken into paragraphs like this:

"Hi Steve," Moon said as she looked up from her reading. "How are you doing?"
"Oh, I'm fine," replied Steve. He walked over to the water cooler for some refreshment.

For paragraphs about ideas (thoughts are generally considered like "conversations"), etc. here's a sample:

Sally couldn't go home. {The first paragraph is usually the "topic" or "theme"}
She had enough. She hated that little shack. It reminded her of a pig sty.
Joe, on the other hand, loved the house. He thought it was "cozy." They really didn't need much, after all. It was just the two of them.

The idea of that first paragraph is that Sally hated the house. The rest of that paragraph's job is to explain why. The second paragraph's theme is that Joe loved the house.

So there's a small sample. Mind you, the rules do bend & get broken from time to time, & this is a VERY small sample..so all you other writers out there don't need to get your collective panties in a bunch.

[NewKnight15]

But still noone has answered my one question.. how? <br>?

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~Toma El Riesgo~