The Kingdoms Secert CHAPTER ONE (told as steve)

[NewKnight15]

~~~Im used to writing more of a SCIFI style so dont laugh~~~
~~Prelude~~~
Every great kingdom has its secerts it is only natural. But only some secerts are dangerous enough to ruin a life.
~~Chapter One~~
Acronia* was a city of beauty, with its rolling waterfalls, clear rivers and lakes, and even the happy peaceful life of the townsfolk. But all of this beauty was easily outdone by the castle. All of this i noticed as i rode through the kingdom. As i came upon the gates i noticed that they were a beautful redish wood on the outside but backed by a sort of iron/steel. The walls were high but decortive with many colors and only had a few sentrys on the present shift. As the gates opened you could see the knights fencing but with more of a pleasure then of a work. There was pottery everywhere from the beging stages to being shipped out. Every now and then a knight would stop his pratice and help here and there. All of which i summarized to mean that the kingdom had a magnficent army but perferred peace. As the carriage came to a stop a stranger walked towards me. "I am Mango, the queens righthand man... well woman" she said with a giggle. "I am Steve, the detective you sent for. How may i be of service?" i replied but still noticed the very good outline of the womans,Mango, body. "Yes i shall show you to your room then the King has requested your presence." she simply stated. As she walked away i couldnt help but notice that she did indeed have a very nice body.
LATER THAT DAY
"We have been having some trouble with bandits lately and i was wondering if you would head up the police unit searching for them..." The king, a man named acron, asked politley so where he was nice but you could tell it was an order not a request. He was built big, not fat big but muscle big with a huge sword by his righthand in case of emergency. This is a man thatnever underestemates his enemies, I thought to myself.
"Why yes of course I would be happy too," knowing that i had no other choice.
"Very well then you shall begin tomorrow. MANGO!!" the king called
"Yes my Lord?" she asked as she came running.
"Take the new noble here and show him a nihgt out on the town would you please?" The king again asked/ordered.
"Why of course my Lord, I would have it no other way." she responded eyeing me.
"Very well then, i shall see you tomrrow at noon. Goodnight," the king said dismissing us and already turning to other work that busied his day.
"Being King does not suit him." Mango said as we walked away.
"Why do you say that?" I asked not really caring. DAMN she had a body.
"He used to be a great warrior and a knight. But then as king he was not allowed to do all that but instead forced to deal with represtives from other kingdms and the such." she explained also swinging her hips a little more after noticing my like for them.
"Doesnt he have a son to pass on the burden?" I wondered.
"No unfortunly Lady Zelda has been unable to bear children." she explained.
"But then what will happen to the kingdom when he dies?" I asked shocked.
"It is undecided... Maybe the ghost will take over," She joked and then laughed at her own joke.
"What ghost?" i asked a little afraid.
"Oh its nothing to worry about just on clear night some people say that they hear screaming coming from the basement. Just a legend nothing to be worried about i promise you." she explained.
"I... I.. I wasnt worried." i managed to stutter. All I got in return was a smile.
"So Ive still got to show you the night out. Should we head for dinner first?" she asked.
"Sounds good to me" i responded. "Where would you like to go?" I continued.
"I know a place its called Spaces Galaxy."
LATER THAT NIGHT (BACK AT THE CASTLE)
"Ihoped you enjoyed your night as much as I did," Mango said smiling.
They had worked their way back to her room to say goodnight.
"I did very much thank you. I hope I will get to see you say tomorrow night for dinner again...?" I asked leaving the invation open.
"Are you asking me out on a date Mister?" Mango joked smiling.
And I answered the only way i could trhink of. I reached down and gave her a hard kiss goodnight.
"Goodnight Mango," i said as i walked down the corriors.
"Goodnight Steve," she replied with a hint of amusment in her voice and then...
"Hey Steve! Ill see you for dinner tomorow night on one condition... Can my boyfriend come too?" she asked.
Damn, I thought.
~~~End of Chapter One~~~
***Sorry if i offended anyone (mostly Zelda, Mango, and Steve) but its all part of the story. Just wait and see. I am also sorry if i got anyones parts they usualy play out of place but i havent been here long so i dont know much. Im tired of writing plus i want to do one chapter at a time. so tell me what you think. and space can a catus write a story?***

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~Toma El Riesgo~

[Dame d'escrime]

Kiss on the first "not date".
Slow down, boy, you'll run out of steam before you get to the good part.
Draw it out, let the audience wait, anticipate. Create a little tension.

Otherwise, good job.

[NewKnight15]

How come steve gets like 40 replys and i get one? and i would like to say thank you dame

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[Zelda]

Knight it may be because there are alot of people away. Personally I like what you wrote, it stops mango trying to steal my Husband!

[Dame d'escrime]

You're welcom...be patient, they'll come around.

[NewKnight15]

im doing the next chapter in the morning and you get more into it zelda. thanks. whered everyone go? im leavin soon

[its_me_mango]

ha! with this legendary figure, i should be able to steal away the hearts of many a knight, but alas, as they sang in wwII, "They're either too young or too old" and I mean it.

[NewKnight15]

here part two comes

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[SteveMcDonough]

What can I say? http://www.fencing.net/forum/biggrin.gif

Keep it going!

(why did you pick me? Just out of curiousity.)

Steve. (detective and letch) http://www.fencing.net/forum/smile.gif

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Pottery ROCKS! (er.. surely poetry?)

[NewKnight15]

~~~~CHAPTER TWO~~~~
"Ugghhh..."i moaned as I rolled over and looked at the sun dial. "7:00 I woke up at freakin 7:00 in the freakin morning and I cant get back to sleep," I said to noone in partuclair* . As you can probably already tell I am not a morning person.Might as well get up and start working on my personal project. Ever since Mango told me about that ghost I decided to figure it out. Ghosts were and always had been my favorite mystery. I opened the door and meet a womans scream.
"EEEEKKKKK!!!!!!"
"HUH!?!" i wondered then I looked down."Oh Damn!" in all my rush to figure out the mystery i had forgotten to put on ANY clothes."Sorry," I said to the woman and wen tin to get something. About 15 min later i stepped out to an empty hallway and began my work down to the dunguns. All i saw were cell after cell of strangely odd painted cells. They were blue,green,red,orange,purple... even one in the kingdoms flag. Weird.. i thought but hey whatever floats your boat. I realized that i had never paid much attention the the actual flag so i went in for a closer look. It was also the only one that had two torches. Maybe Kings that had been captured were thrown in here. That was an idea cuz everytime they looked around they would be reminded where they were and the two torches, one of which was silver one gold, to give the captured king an sense of luxury over the other prisonors. I webt on to look at the torches. They both had hinges on them so they looked like a secert switch to a hidden room. Hmmm... If one led to a secert room then the other lead to... death? Gold would be royalty but Silver would be modesty. I pulled the silver one... The entire wall began to move. I stepped in to a dark damp room. There was a single cell and another room off to the side. In the cell was a boy about the age of 14.
"Help me... Thank God youre here!" he choked out.
"Who did this to you... Who are you... Wheres the key?" i began firing off questions.
"I am Prince... Prince... Oh God I have forgotten my last name... A..Accc..."he tried
"Acron?" i suggested.
"Yes!! Thats it. I am Prince Acron and..." suddenly he stopped and footsteps could be heard.
BANG!!!
"umph," I sighed as i began to black out. Standing over me was a woman with a sword. The same sword she had used the flat of the blade to hit me with moments before... As i began to fade out i noticed one thing. Damn she had a body.
~~~End of Chapter Two~~~

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[NewKnight15]

Steve, I really liked your story and it was the first one i read when i got here. I didnt know that many people but I knew your name and when i was thinking of a main character i was going to use moon but your name popped into my head at the last moment. I am only going to do about 4 chapters of this paruclair story but other storys will be based off of it and will include space a little bit more.

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[Moonitic]

::ahem:: Lady Moon didn't need to kiss Lady Mango, so it worked out much better for Steve.

And keep your drooling to yourselves, boys!

[SteveMcDonough]

Only four chapters?
Bummer. http://www.fencing.net/forum/smile.gif

I've only been in two episodes and I'm nude?! lol


Steve.

[NewKnight15]

yea my next one is star wars the porn. LOL jk

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[Fencing Angel]

well i can't say that i have ever seen anything more creative.. i like it.. lots.. have to add somemore people in there too.. like a knight and his lady or something like that..

Just some ideas..

P.S. don't think that just because i said a knight and his lady it means that i want/wanted to be in the story.. for one thing i don't have a lady yet.. http://www.fencing.net/forum/smile.gif

(note the yet........)

[NewKnight15]

~~~~~~~~Chapter Three~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

I was in a pool of water, swimming... swimming.. I was flying through the air.Huh?
Oh nevermind it was just a dream."Ugghhh..." I groaned and reached towards my head. My hand came away bloddy and i felt a huge bump.
I regained my vision and looked up.Huh? stone celling, three stone walls, and the fourth was made out of iron bars...
"What the hell? Im in prison!!" OK OK so maybe it wasnt the brighest comment veer but hey i had just been hit in the head with a huge freakin sword. I looked over to my right and saw the young prince.
"Goodmorning!" he said rather cheerfully.
I just looked at him like he was mad.
"Breakfast!!" A strangely familar womans voice said.
"Mango?!?" I accused.Then it all came back to me, the last image as i faded into blackness.
"Yep thats me, now are you going to starve yourself or come and eat?" she asked.
"EXCUSE ME!!! Im in a cell loked up with the prince, who may i mention I didnt think exsited, and youre offering me breakfast?? Does anything seem a little strange to you about that?!?"I praticaly yelled.
"Ok I put you into the cell because I thought you might get a little mad when you came too. When i knocked you out I didnt know who you were and since i was ordered to protect the prince and this area I had to do it."she replied rather calmy for the situation. Then she grabbed a key and let me out. As we were eating she explained to me why there was a prince in a cell.
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The queen had once traveled to different nations to try to bring peace to the corutny*. When she went to the kingdom above the stars as they called it she met the king whos name was odly comman enough.. James. Well she was immeadilty seduced by him and the next thing she new it...(hint hint). She woke up in the morning in her own bed with king acron beside her. She immeadilty dismissed it as a dream and went on with her buisness. But as the months went by she started to feel a little ill. I, Mango, came to the conclusion that she was at last pregant*. But she innested that the king and her fell asleep early the other night to say the least. But still about 15 years ago she gave birth to a baby boy. He was given to a comman family for safety because the queen instead she didnt know where he came from. But one day while he was playing in the sand he found a box. Inside was a single piece of paper. It talked about how the prince from the stars would bring order to the kingdoms around the globe. The queen heard of this and ordered the boy brought here where he would learn under my care. I have tried to teach him how to fight but it seems he already knew how before the age of three.
*********
"and that is the story of the prince." she expalined.
"Help!!! Help!! The palace is under attack!" Steve and Mango ran off to try and help but they forgot one thing.. the cell was still unlocked. Silently the boy who called himself James sneaked out and ran towards the battle.
~~~End of Chapter Three~~~~

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[This message has been edited by NewKnight15 (edited 07-17-2001).]

[Zelda]

Ok, have I ever mentioned I dont want kids???? BTW Knight, good story, I'm really enjoying it!

[NewKnight15]

Thanks Zelda. I seem to write better in the morning so im doing the last chapter there

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[NewKnight15]

~~~Chapter Four, The couclusion, told as Steve, Mango, and James~~~
**Mango**
I raced past the empty cells with Steve right behind me. I ran to the only place i could think of.. the kings chambor.
"What the hell is going on!?!" I yelled as soon as i got in there.
"The fencingsucks and the muu are attacking us.. why did you think we meant when we yelled were under attack? Now go out there and fight!" he ordered distracted
I ran to the outer walls and raced up to the platform.
"Oh **** ..."I muttered. There had to be over 150,000 men jogging up tp our gates. Behind them about 5,000 archers, and behind them 25,000 calvary. At the most we had 20,000 soilders, 500 archers, and 1,200 calvary.
"This is gonna hurt..."Steve said responsivly* as he came onto the platform.
"Everbody down!" Someone ordered. Not even thinking i fell to the ground with steve already there before me. Just in time too i thought as i looked up and saw thousands of arrows go by.
"Counter attack!" the same person yelled.
"Space? Honey what are you doing here?" I asked as i saw my boyfriend getting ready below me for the enemy when the breached the gates.
"Just released me from the med babe im in this fight. Good luck." he replied already running with his other knight friends.
"Be careful"I yelled as he ran out of sight.
***Steve***
So thats who her boyfriend is... great a knight. shell never go out with me now. who would choose a cop over a knight?" i wondered dissapointed.
"Here they come!" Someone yelled.
BOOM you could hear the ram hit the door as they tried to breach our gate and get into the castle itself.
Boom... cccrrrreeeeaaaakkkkk.... SNAP. And down the gate went.
"Oh God..."i prayed.
"Attack!!"someone from the oppoding army yelled.
"counterattack" space yelled.
The sound of screams, metal on metal, and battlecries couldbe heard as the to armys crashed into one another. It was going to be a swift short battle when we were easly outnumbered at least 4 to 1. I picked up a sword and raced after Mango into the heat of the battle. I struck right and left using everything i had ever learned. I struck down many of the enemies until my sword was parried in a thrust and flung away. I was on the outskirts of the battle now so noone could help me. The enemy knight saw that i had no weapon and began to laugh at me. He brought his blade up and started to swing but then an arrow apeard through his chest.
But the force that he had been swinging with still carried the blade.
"Umph.."i sighed as the blade sliced through me and i began to see a hazy black around the edge of my vision. So this is what death looks like i thought to myself.
***Mango***
"NNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOO" I yelled as I say Steve go down. I ran through the battle killing everything that moved. My anger suppling my motaviton. I had fought along side my husband until he too was struck down. We were losing, I hated to admit it but the place where i grew up and had lived out my adult life was going to be put into the flames. As long as that was going to happen I might as well take down as many of the other side as i could. This is it I thought This is how it ends....
***James***
"NO" i yelled as Steve fell to the ground. I was too late.
"This is for youSteve"Iyelled as I raced into the heat of the battle. Hopeless is the one word i could think of that could describe the battle. I saw someone turn towards me and raise their sword. Without thinking I struck. Thud was the sound i heard as his body hit the ground.
"Mother.. Father... Please help me.." i begged. I had come to love this kingdom and these people and my newest friend was already dead. Strangly enough Clouds seemd to roll in and lightning played out over the battlefield. An opening appeared in the clouds and armour and a sword came down... straight towards me. Through the hole i could see a beautiful kingdom...
**Zelda**
"The kingdom of the stars... James!" I realized as i remembered the castle.
***Mango***
"What the Hell?" i thought as i saw it happening. Soon every knights eyes from both sides were looking skyward. More holes appeared in the clouds and dark amored warriors began dropping from the sky forming a circle aroound one lone boy about the age of 15. No.. could it be? James? I thought I locked him back in the cell.
***James***
As the sword pierced the ground next to me the amour snapped itself to form onto my body. Dark warriors were at my side waiting for my orders... I picked up the sword, raised it above my head a said very softly but still everyone heard i said..
"Clear the kingdom of its invaders,"
The dark warriors rushed into the battle and with the acron knights made short work of the muu and fencing sucks. I looked at my sword... weird. It was jet black but stil seemd to glow. every now and then something would shoot across the blade.. somethings that looked like shooting stars. But of course by now the battle had resumed. I ran into and the magical sword killed everything with one swipe. In minutes the battle was done. The kings captured and the warriors either dead or running. My knights and I went back to the kings chambor and awwaited his arrival. When he came he just said.
"We truely owe you Prince James. You are the new knight and the new order"
***Steve***
"Ouch! dont you think thats a little tight?" i complained.
"Dont be such a big baby. It will make you get better faster." Mango said as she dressed his wound. And then pulled him into a kiss that lasted several minutes.
***James***
One of my knights came to my side and asked me if I would like to return home.
"This is my home my dear companion... this is home..."
~~~~~~~~~~~THE END~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
I am sorry my friends but this is the time where my story comes to an end. I am leaving Saturday the 21st for 3 weeks. But up to then I am going to do a short story everyday about Prince James and his dark knights. Of course I will only do this without any objections... are there any? But I must go now tell me what you think.

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[This message has been edited by NewKnight15 (edited 07-15-2001).]

[Iwant2bafencer]

What is it with you guys and stoping stories at the good parts?! What happens with mango and steve? What happens with mango and space? What happens next??!!

(I think that you can tell I liked it! Can I join the stories?? Maybe that will give me some leverage in this kingdome and someone will notice me. Just a though you don't have to put me in if you don't want to.)
Lady Rosaline