Short Horror Story

[Westley]

I wrote this in like 2 hours, and there's been no revisions, so you'll just have to suffer through first draft woes. Oh well. Tell me what you think.

http://westley0907.wordpress.com/2007/10/19/3/

[Neinteen]

You call that short? I'll read it and leave a comment on the blog ( if i can )

[RkfdFencer]

will come back and read it tomorrow or Monday. Looking forward to it.

[Lemonaide]

You write very well, a little bit like another writer that I know of, who is also [coincidentially] a fencer, but well written prose, organized. It is interesting to see that you can cover a difficult theme covering the main problem of anti-social behaviors and get to the bottom line of the problem that they face. Going to the John. I wonder if many of them suffer from chronic constipation and need to hear screaming in order to 'go', and I'm not being funny, I think that's what your chapter says?

Maybe this was just my own interpretation but when I started to read the chapter, I felt that the main character was a young man, then later on he tells us that he is 'old'. But we interpret according to what we know.



That said, fence, fence fence!