You write very well, a little bit like another writer that I know of, who is also
[coincidentially] a fencer, but well written prose, organized. It is interesting to see that you can cover a difficult theme covering the main problem of anti-social behaviors and get to the bottom line of the problem that they face. Going to the John. I wonder if many of them suffer from chronic constipation and need to hear screaming in order to 'go', and I'm not being funny, I think that's what your chapter says?
Maybe this was just my own interpretation but when I started to read the chapter, I felt that the main character was a young man, then later on he tells us that he is 'old'. But we interpret according to what we know.
That said, fence, fence fence!
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