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    just poetry

    This is a thread for poetry. No gimmicks, no rules, just quality poetry. Cornflower, no sex.

    I feel the pop, beneath my knee
    Thoughts through my mind, will I ever be free?
    I cannot walk, I strain to talk
    It starts to swell, My work for naught, all to hell
    my will is broken, tears paint the floor
    will I ever run again?
    "I've seen things you people wouldn't believe. And from this side only! The flight of a half-man, half-bird. Dinosaurs nuzzling their young in pastures where strip malls should be. Cookies on dowels. All those moment, lost in time. Gone, like eggs off a hooker's stomach. Time to die" -Phil Ken Sebben

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    Hey! I'm offended

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    sex is good. why say no?
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    She weeps her tears
    the day is lost,
    her love lies cold
    'pon fields of frost,
    the artic air
    with winter's hew,
    breathe's forth it's
    cold and icey dew,
    'cross meadows red
    with slain men's blood,
    so else may live
    they held the flood,
    of enemy force
    they stood and fought,
    and so with death
    more life was bought.

    Far from there
    upon her bed,
    the love of one
    lay down her head,
    she weeps for love
    of lover lost,
    the tangled sheets
    from where she's tossed,
    caress her shivering
    sobbing form,
    as she weathers
    her grief-filled storm,
    and so close eyes
    red-rimmed and wet,
    she fights the void
    of sleep and yet,
    the sands of slumber
    drag her down,
    as darkness falls
    on furrowed brow.

    Her breathing's fast
    and yet she grins
    she feels her lover's
    hold again,
    she smells his scent
    she hears his voice,
    o'er the hammer
    of her heart's noise,
    he whispers softly
    and calls her name,
    knowing that
    his short time wanes,

    Time leads home
    and home is here,
    within my arms
    I hold you dear,
    within my arms
    I hold all life,
    the end of pain
    the end of strife,
    yet I must leave
    for life has fled,
    even now
    I feel death's thread,
    So must I leave
    and leave I will,
    but you should know
    I love you still,
    take heart my love
    hear my last breath,
    my love for you
    ends not in death.

    And with a sigh
    he leaves his life,
    she lays asleep
    and feels the knife,
    that cuts the link
    the mortal thread,
    and leaves her true love dead.

    And so she wakes
    eyes open wide,
    she knows the truth
    her love has died,
    and yet the grief
    does not consume,
    for she can feel
    within her womb,
    that he has left
    not just a kiss
    but a seed of hope
    a seed of bliss,
    so though she's sad
    the tears turn dry,
    she no longer feels
    the need to cry,
    one life sparks
    another ends,
    and life's full circle
    is whole again.


    ---- Inspired by LOTR and my friend 'Gumi...
    "Since when does being a patriot in America mean shutting your mouth?"
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    zz,zz,zz,zz,zz,zz!

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    Nothing against cornflower or her favorite topic, but this is a thread I want to keep clean. Conflower can go write orgasm poems in another thread.
    "I've seen things you people wouldn't believe. And from this side only! The flight of a half-man, half-bird. Dinosaurs nuzzling their young in pastures where strip malls should be. Cookies on dowels. All those moment, lost in time. Gone, like eggs off a hooker's stomach. Time to die" -Phil Ken Sebben

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    so far there's been two poems.... here's a little ditty i wrote two seconds ago:

    Oh, there was an old man of Hadouken
    Who in his boots was quite shakin
    He told colnflower to fix
    while talkin' about college chicks
    oh that sad man of Hadouken

    Nothing personal, of course
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    Now that I have written and published (on the web) a poem, I feel that I am in a position to critique others' verse.

    It's a limerick not a ditty...I'm not sure what the difference is.

    hadouken (ha-doo-kehn, duh every hard core street fighter player knows that) and shakin don't rhyme.

    replace "while talkin' about college chicks" with "while talkin "bout chicks" to help the rhythm.

    Tsk, tsk, it's bad form to recycle words within the same verse...
    "Since when does being a patriot in America mean shutting your mouth?"
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    zz,zz,zz,zz,zz,zz!

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    please... 'twas merely in mockery of what me and DFP were talking about online thanks for the feedback though, I appreciate. and thanks for enlightening me about Hadouken, i had no bloody idea what that word meant... now i kind of do...

    Allow me to make a new Limerick ( )

    There was a nice man of Denelize
    Who did so well to criticize
    He's quite a screamer
    That jolly Esskreemer
    Oh that nice man of Denelize

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    hadouken is the sound that ken and ryu (two street fighter characters) make when they produce their special move, a flaming ball o' chi.

    I'm not from denelize... now you're just making words up...
    "Since when does being a patriot in America mean shutting your mouth?"
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    zz,zz,zz,zz,zz,zz!

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    There once was a lad named hillbilly
    who was looking for his lil' filly
    he found her one night
    and they had a big fight
    'cause she said that he was so silly.
    "Since when does being a patriot in America mean shutting your mouth?"
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    zz,zz,zz,zz,zz,zz!

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    you're _supposed_ to make up the place the person comes from, mannnn

    and I hate it when people call me silly. Man.
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    Might this belong better in Fantasy Land?
    There are no damn chickens in my room!
    "All that is required for evil to prevail is for good men to do nothing." - Edmund Burke

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    Find em
    Fork em
    Feed em
    Forget em
    Forever

    Whip it in
    Whip it out
    Wipe it off
    worry

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    I'd write some of mine but none of my poems are like other ppls. My mommy says I'm special.....
    I'm not suffering from insanity. I'm enjoying every minute of it.

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    Poems, ok. I have several written in one of my more reflective times. This is one of the lighter ones.

    ----------------------

    Wasted Days…?

    The living room sofa is a wonderful place
    To rest your eyes
    Or stare into space,
    Or stuff your face
    Or sit and sigh
    And muse about the reasons why.

    With big cushions propped behind your head
    Why bother going to bed
    When you can stay and watch the world go by,
    Or watch a film instead?

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    copyright me 2003
    I wish I could think of something witty to write here.

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    WOW, Haze, I love that poem. That's really good. Like REALLY good. Rep point good.

    DFP, you unfortunately almost had your thread hijacked by your own Pack.

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    Quote Originally Posted by mrbiggs
    WOW, Haze, I love that poem. That's really good. Like REALLY good. Rep point good.

    DFP, you unfortunately almost had your thread hijacked by your own Pack.
    where?
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    here. Hi DFP!!!
    Proditio plerumque amatur, proditor odio habetur.
    -Plutarch

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    This isn't a Hi-jack... lol
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    hehehe! A pun!
    Proditio plerumque amatur, proditor odio habetur.
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